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    dots Submission Name: Gone & Forgottendots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGone & Forgottendots

    gone, forgotten
    never to be seen
    this innocent girl
    played the world you see
    as she lived life with a smile on her face
    deep down she was dying
    looking for a way to escape
    but this day would be different to the rest
    as this day she finally won
    against this cruel world
    she wished had never begun
    this quiet night
    she sat alone
    planning her revenge
    on the people who loved her most
    she went thought her bag
    and she found
    a gun, knife, pills
    for her intentions were simple
    no one understood
    this girl was messed up
    it was all your fault
    but which of these 3 would work the best
    which would cause have the most effect
    she took the gun in her hand
    and up against the wall she stand
    with this piece of metal she felt strong
    like nothing would ever go wrong
    as she placed the gun against her head
    she swore she would never return
    to a place of such disgrace
    then squeezed the trigger
    and left this world dead

    Submitted on 2007-04-08 22:30:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very powerful and emotional... I really like it.. Keep it up...
    Love ya
    | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by babygirl09 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this alot. Very powerful, alot of emotion.
    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by onexlifex1chanc | [ Reply to This ]

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