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    dots Submission Name: As Time keeps Passingdots
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    Author: lah
    ASL Info:    20/F/Thousand oaks
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 26/47/36
    Words: 589
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 705
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       Stop waiting for things to happen and do it yourself.......the world makes some things alot more glamorouse then they really are


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    dotsAs Time keeps Passingdots
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    Cause were always waiting for that perfect song
    Were always waiting for that perfect face
    and we'll dream of days to come
    Maybe not tomorrows that await
    It may not be five years from now

    Life isn't that perfect song
    Its not that perfect phrase
    The one you carry around in your heart

    Its an hour glass
    With no thoughts or feelings
    It seems to go faster as you get older
    Cause all the poems you used to write
    All those stories you used to read about
    all those times you cried yourself to sleep

    There is no perfect melody to sing you songs of praise and pain
    We'll get along in age
    and the moments that fly by we realize

    That words can cut deeper then knives
    That lies kill worse then guns
    And the worst part is
    Your not the only one that feels this way

    If we stood alone in our sorrow
    Then the less pain there is too pass
    Then there would be few broken hearts
    and the tears we shed would be of happiness

    Not these materialistic abnormalities so many of us try so hard to work for
    I'm not impressed by your shiny new car
    Or your big White house with roaming horses

    Open your heart to me
    speak of true happiness
    and if in your heart lies hurt
    Then i'ld say you've accomplished nothing

    Cause even the man who has everything can be the saddest man of all time
    And now I'll show you me

    I live in a one bedroom apartment
    My car looks like a piece of shit
    I get by on minimum wage
    And I sing my heart on a stage
    I don't even get paid

    and in this apartment
    I kick off my shoes and climb into a warm bed
    Waiting is that someone special
    Maybe were in love, maybe not
    But i'm showered in goodnight kisses
    As my leaking roof sings me to sleep

    Or maybe its me and a roomate
    we talk about today
    Have ourselves a couple laughs
    and I wake to work at a place
    where these familiar faces smile
    and we laugh as we work the day away

    My crappy car and i cruise down the streets
    It gets me where I need to go
    What else do you need
    And this time were on our way to a club
    and I sing about my past
    You know where i come from

    And I walk off that little stage
    with a smile on my face
    I lost myself in that moment
    Opened my heart
    Someone even said I was the best

    Now tell me whose more succesful
    That girl who lives her day
    Without regrets and a smile on her face
    Or that man he walks into his billion dollar house with no one to come home too

    Eventually we realize
    Life isn't a fairy tale
    its not a movie we can play
    there were no slow songs when i fell In love
    and there won't be that special guy
    The one who drops everything just tell you something

    Cause there won't be that perfect song
    There won't be that perfect moment
    Unless we all stop waiting
    for someone else to write those lyrics
    For someone else to go in for that perfect kiss





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      Wow. This poem is the perfect way to describe life and everything about it. I picture you driving in your car to the club to sing about your "crappy" life and someone telling you that you are the best. I think that everyone should look at life as how you have written it in this unnamed poem. I really liked this poem (I'm adding it to my favorites) and I will be reading more of your work.
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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