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    dots Submission Name: Outcast (Mirror Mirror) [[[extended.]]]dots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 725
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       You never know how much you impact someone by just words. I'm talking from personal experiance here I guess.


    [[A few people were asking me to make this longer. I kinda agree, it does seem unfinished. I'll leave the old one up incase you guys dont like my second go on this. Thanks to everyone who gave me feedback on the original one. I'm always looking for ways to improve myself as a writer.]]


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    dotsOutcast (Mirror Mirror) [[[extended.]]]dots
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    So misjudged, so misunderstood
    Was a lonely little girl in a blazed neighborhood
    She never really did anything big for herself
    Except write of her pain in the books on the shelves

    They called her "goth" and they called her a loser
    If only you knew anything, you'd know I'm far from either
    And it was small things like this that made her question her trust
    For even the very few people she knew and she loved

    Pretty soon when she looked in the mirror
    The reflection she witnessed was one that scared her
    A beautiful girl is starting to beleive what she hears
    The verbal abuse she suffered every day by her peers

    Oh mirror mirror on my fist printed wall
    Am I really the homliest one of them all?
    Am I really that hidious to deserve all of this?
    In minutes afterward, her life was over by seven cuts down the wrist

    Now she lies cold in the ground under a polished stone
    All because your words made her feel unbareably alone
    Her heartbreaks were those of your own harrassment before
    Tell me,what exactly did you do that for?




    Submitted on 2007-04-09 17:38:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. this is so true and so straight to the point in a really artistic way. I loved this. This is going on my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...its really good...uhh....i agree with your topic...people judge others to harshly before even knowing them...and to call others names is really cruel...i know how it feels to be made fun of and to be a loner so to speak...its no fun at all....but i over came that so maybe (if this is about you in some sense) you can over come it to...and not let what others say bother you because they are the ones who are insecure and have to tear people down to make themseves "feel" bigger and better...but they are not...just be yourself...great poem....
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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