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    dots Submission Name: Alone I Use To Be (revised)dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       To my soul mate.. my love.. Thank you dave, for being that certain someone

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    dotsAlone I Use To Be (revised)dots

    Alone I use to be!

    Until now ...

    Until fate unravled and we met..
    Now forever living in bliss

    With you along my side...
    And myself along your's

    Forever we shall stand as one
    Our lives with one another have yet begun!

    Threw it all we'll make it
    Making it out together in the end

    "Til' Death Do Us Part"

    We'll stand along one another's side!!

    Holding one up when needed...
    Being one anothers ears and eyes

    If nessary..

    For you always have my back
    As I have yours...

    Together as one we'll be whole...

    With a stronger bond..
    With stronger personalities..

    Can't you see we were ment to be.. to me
    Together, until the end of time.

    Though throughout death we'll be apart..
    Our sprits will unite together as one...

    And even now...
    When apart,

    We are with one another..
    In each others prencense!

    Our spirts combinde into one!

    Submitted on 2007-04-09 18:11:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one definitely needs to be expanded quite a bit baby. It's basically one thought repeated a few different ways. Please add to this, because I really like the theme of it, but I want to hear so much more! It dripping with hints that you have so much more to say, but you cut it short for some unknown reason...

    Like you said, "'Till death do us part". You really think death could keep me from you? Not a chance! I will always find you, no matter what worlds we pass through. We are starcrossed, and I wouldn't have it any other way!

    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Wired | [ Reply to This ]
      Really good, it's really sweet and expresses good emotion...keep up the good work....! :)
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]

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