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    dots Submission Name: where im at so fardots
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    Author: HappyBuddaH
    ASL Info:    26
    Elite Ratio:    2.03 - 61/21/12
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 830
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    Bytes: 296



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    dotswhere im at so fardots
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    redundant like the sun, i bleed into the sea
    the damage is already done,
    and theres nowhere else id rather be.

    a blessed confession, given to a dirty priest
    the band plays a closed session,
    i close my eyes and drive, headed out due east.





    Submitted on 2007-04-09 18:39:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really interesting quick write
    You were really able to capture my imagination with your words
    To me you were speaking of how life in this case a childs life is very repetitive and it is hard to break away from the basic routine amd let a little change into ones life

    This was almost like a vision into someones life and by keeping it short you kept the mystery of life alive
    Great Job!!!
    I really liked it
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, i like this. I realy like the frist line. and the fourth line. i think this flows realy well. GOOD WRITE!
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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