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    dots Submission Name: Strengthdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 639
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    Bytes: 1063



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    dotsStrengthdots
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    Feelings overwhelm me..

    Happiness wants to push itself through
    The truth seeps in my past has yet been dealt with

    I need some security
    I need something..
    Someone.. to rely on!

    This happiness want to break threw..
    But my past has got to be dealt with..

    I would love to run away from it all..
    And take you with me
    Leave this.. these issues.. these concerns behind

    I'd love to begin an entire NEW life with you.
    Possibly have a family
    Two little children
    Small blue house...

    Ohh.. How I long to simply run away...
    But I need to be strong

    I need to hold back these tears
    I need to bit my lip

    And if I may cry during the duration of these leading events..
    If I shall shed a few tears...

    Please pay no attention to them

    I need to strengthen up!
    I need to get my act together...

    Otherwise I may lose it all...




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      I really love this one Jackie. Something about it just makes it stand out among your other pieces. I think it's one of the best overall, truly! I love the little hint of a daydream in the middle, and then how you snap back to reality and force yourself to be strong. Your expectations are very realistic. Your daydream will come true baby, I promise! Not sure about the blue house though! lol. I love you!

    -Dave
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Wired | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it ... there are times when you feel overwhelmed and you can't let or get over things in the past, and you know you need to be strong. but end the end if you DO let go it will all pay off...
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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