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    dots Submission Name: what could have beendots
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    Author: crazy_83
    ASL Info:    28/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 27/29/18
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 602



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    dotswhat could have beendots
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    letting go of what made sense
    reaching forward, body tense
    pains inevitable
    but needs to be felt
    memories ignite then slowly melt

    a short release as my breath exhales
    my reflection in the mirror momentarily pales
    lifes questinable
    as I ponder the past
    mistakes Ive made and they are not my last

    my heart slows, broken and sore
    my mind hazes as I fall to the floor
    reasons debatable
    why I couldn't hold on and let the pain go
    the past was to much and now i will never know...




    Submitted on 2007-04-10 04:32:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like it. descriptive , your words were well placed.

    *skinnard*
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by skinnard | [ Reply to This ]
      That is awesome keep up the good work

    ~Druecilla~
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by Druecilla | [ Reply to This ]


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