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    dots Submission Name: It Got Me In The End...dots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsIt Got Me In The End...dots
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    Crawling under the surface,
    The disease spreads far too fast.
    Gripped in jaws like death,
    Hope lies murdered on the floor.

    Gasping in the cold night,
    I wake to teeth again.
    Gnawing at my lungs,
    I guess I'll fester after all.

    Burnt through like paper,
    The skin falls off in chunks.
    Decaying flesh on the wind,
    No hope in the end..

    Grey patches bubbling over,
    Filled with my dispair.
    Soon bones are snapping,
    Like branches in the sun.

    Ruin, close behind,
    Wrenches free my will.
    A bag of oozing meat,
    I may as well just die.




    Submitted on 2007-04-10 11:05:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      simple but good..I'm hoping to read something fresh and a lil different though..keeping the darkness in form..
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      nice to hear from you again.... lovely i like the decay theme. dark oozing imagry just gives me chillls....delightful

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    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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