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    dots Submission Name: Untitled By Author, Titled By Someonedots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 753
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I had a bad day, it stemmed from it. Hurray for fruits of apathy!


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    dotsUntitled By Author, Titled By Someonedots
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    A golden light,
    More pure than my apathy,
    Shines down on my little graveyard.
    It tries to fill the void.

    Futily it comes,
    Bleaching trees,
    And casting shadows.
    I hate this pleasantry.

    I find it's mocking beautiful.
    The graves all seem to agree.
    They despise it as much as I do.
    Even the fog can't stand to stay.

    Down on the shore,
    The smell of salt and decay,
    Paint the masterpiece,
    That dies before me.

    I admonish the gloom of night,
    The gentle hand,
    That invites me to sleep.
    The silence, I hate to love.

    The moon sits in the sky,
    Stealing the cast of the Sun.
    It's really quite tireing.
    But if so, why am I awake?

    Lapse to the morning,
    In it's boring golden grays.
    I believe I'm a paradox,
    That can't think for itself.




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      Futily it comes,
    Bleaching trees,
    And casting shadows.
    I hate this pleasantry

    ooh this fits my mood so well you're work remind me of a mild Marlyn-Manson.... sweet honest and utterly despisably

    love it lovey
    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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