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    dots Submission Name: Hell Sings Above Medots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 724
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    Description:
       The last stanza I stole, yes that's right I stole it, from 'Rocky Horror Picture Show', but I've always wanted to utilize the line in something. And despite it's plagerism, I'm at very least crediting it, so don't make a huge fuss, please.


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    dotsHell Sings Above Medots
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    Chiming...
    The single note,
    Floating on the clouds,
    Above the lily moon.

    Ringing...
    The bell falls,
    From the heights of hell,
    To be delivered to the meek.

    Echoes...
    The Siren's Song of Steel,
    Held within it's tounge,
    That of the Lord of Light and Lies Himself.

    Muted...
    The Choir of Mockingbirds,
    Sing noiselessly,
    In thier final silent moment.

    Lilting...
    On the quiet cries,
    And feathers of His Birds,
    Falls the iron cast apocolypse.

    Breathing...
    With the world,
    And hell above,
    He shouts out to those below:

    "And crawling about, the planets face..."
    "Were some insects, called the human race..."
    "Lost in time, and lost in space..."
    "And meaning..."




    Submitted on 2007-04-10 11:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To say the least, this one is unusual and that is exactly why I like it. If anything, it's always the weird things that
    evoke my surprise. Of course, I mean that as a positive. Some great images and well chosen words along with an excellent style make this piece inspirational and intriguing. Hmm...stole the last stanza did you? Well ha ha ha, good for you :)
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      augh!!!!!!!!! wonderful . your time off a has sereved you well.... oh my gawd i love it... looooooove it. so manson meets slipknot... wow. you are amazing

    "Echoes...
    The Siren's Song of Steel,
    Held within it's tounge,
    That of the Lord of Light and Lies Himself."

    mmmmmmmm

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    | Posted on 2007-04-10 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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