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    dots Submission Name: the seeddots

    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       we had to write an extended metaphor for english.
    it had to be inspired by a quote from a book that we read over spring break
    i chose a yellow raft in blue water
    and my quote is "it wasn't so much that i was afraid to leave, as that i was fearful to be gone"

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    dotsthe seeddots

    Enveloped in soil,
    awaiting growth.
    I&#8217;ll one day rise,
    by nature&#8217;s oath.

    How proud to bloom!
    To mature from seed!
    Bursting out of the ground
    of which all passions breed.

    I long for resurrection.
    Live with new petals and leaves.
    Finally to confront
    the sun and the breeze.

    Of all that I&#8217;ve heard,
    what would I miss?
    But is it safer in here,
    am I believing a myth?

    Could I never return
    to my warmth in the earth?
    It&#8217;s all that I&#8217;ve known,
    my home, my worth!

    I&#8217;d love to break through
    But I can wait to sprout.
    For now I will stay
    rooted in doubt.

    Submitted on 2007-04-10 18:42:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey, this is realy good. i like how you say that you long for resurrection. i think that this flows well! yeah.... Good write!
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]

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