Description: yea i found this nice little sweet poem i wrote a few months ago
and i was like wow thats cool
and then i thought abt how things r now, and its completely different.
so i changed the poem .. its now in past tense instead of present thinking about the future. the old version was filled with predictions and doubts. all the negative stuff came true.
sad how life is, isn't it?
*Just let it go, what now can never be*
title is from one of my favorite songs by the way.
We Drift Deeper, Life Goes On -------------------------------------------
We were around each other for years,
We saw each other everyday
but we never spoke.
Until that day.
That one day brought us together.
We talked, we joked,
we laughed, we went out.
we got mad at each other all the time.
I wondered .....
I wondered if it would always be that way.
I told myself it would.
I was wrong.
It's over now.
Of course ....
It was all superficial ...
we spoke of everything,
but never about things that get to us.
Its an ok write. I mean its simplistic which is nice. And the ending really does linger, I agree with jcpdandalice. It seems really...like you did write it spur of the moment ages ago. There isnt that much "umph" in it, if you know what I mean. I really do like the ending, it works really well for the poem. But yeah, good write.
all the lines cast in the shadows of indifference.
excellent write...confessional, sentimental, abrupt and a perfect ending. The question sort of lingers in the air indefinitely, after it finishes, which I think functions perfectly with the subject matter.
Funny how we are usually right about the negative, and then we have to bear with it.