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    dots Submission Name: Meant For Moredots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 367
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 631
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       Listening to one of my mix c.d.s and got inspired. It seems all my inspiration these days comes from songs that have already been written...lol


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    dotsMeant For Moredots
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    Twenty years old and she had
    The world at her fingertips
    All the knowledge that she possessed was lost
    The first time she tasted his lips
    She'd been at the top of her class
    Her dreams were within her reach
    She wanted to write something that would touch the world
    She wanted to learn and to teach.
    She left it all behind for him
    She gave him her heart and her mind
    She never had the slightest inclination
    That he would one day leave her behind.

    She was meant for more
    But she got lost along the way
    She wasted everything she had
    Or that's what she's been heard to say.
    She was meant for more
    She was so damn smart
    But brains don't get you anywhere
    If you sacrifice them for your heart.

    He came from nothing at all
    And believed that was what he'd be
    But he wanted so much more
    That was something she made him see
    He knew he could have it all
    If she was by his side
    She encouraged his every dream
    And she let hers slide
    One day he woke up and looked around
    And wanted it all right then
    He decided she wasn't the one
    And he drifted away in the wind

    He was meant for more
    But his impatience got in the way
    He was only nineteen
    When he left her that day
    He was meant for more
    But his heart was untrue
    He sacrificed anything he could have been
    When he left for something new.

    Now they sit in separate lives
    Casualties of love
    Inspiration never strikes
    Despair fits as a glove
    She longs to be what she once was
    He longs to just be free
    Each thinking that with the other
    Is where they want to be
    She wants to disappear
    He just wants to break away
    But they remain where they are
    Both hoping for the day

    They were meant for more
    They were meant to live
    Both now repressing everything
    That they had to give
    They were meant for more
    A connection that nothing could sever
    They were meant for greater things
    And they were meant to be together.




    Submitted on 2007-04-10 19:45:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good write
    It's sad but so true
    so many people in this world have a lot of potential and just choose to throw it all away on a romantic whim
    sure a guy will make you feel good for a minute
    but an investment in knowledge is something that no one can every take away from you
    and it sucks but people that are surrounded by negative attitudes usually take on that persona and never amount to what they could be.
    stay in school cuz its the best ;)
    adn theres the clique you can only be what you want to be
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by digitalflower | [ Reply to This ]
      Raivn, how can I like this? It was written well, true...and the rhymes were badDass...just, I can't help but think you should not be writing or thinking about this. And for the 4th of July I think everyone needs to come to the Valley and have our own cookout. EVERYONE> Ya?
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, this is pretty sad! And true, really! I've seen it happen, and I'm only in highschool. Girls who have the potential to be smart fall in love and then their brains collapse to a puddle of mush. Just as soon as the boy leaves her, who is typically a directionless punk with no future plans, she is left with nothing but failing grades and an empty heart.

    That's what this reminded me of, anyway.

    Keep oooon writing!
    Stygian
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Stygian | [ Reply to This ]


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