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    dots Submission Name: Losing faithdots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLosing faithdots
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    Sometimes the road turns too sharply,
    The wind fails to be at your back,
    You seem to break apart too easily.
    The soul bleeds and your mind is on rewind.
    Loneliness holds you in its arms,
    but you never seem to slip away.
    Silence fills the empty space,
    The phone is always on the hook.
    Friends don't come around anymore.
    Because you chose seclusion,
    your heart fell to pieces,
    but there's no one to mend it.
    Life lost it's meaning,
    And you started losing faith.
    I wish i could save you,
    But i alone can't give you grace.




    Submitted on 2007-04-10 21:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When all else is gone, faith is the one thing that we must cling to. This write is quite unique and superbly crafted.

    Very well done indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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