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    dots Submission Name: A revalationdots

    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The cock crows it haunting sound,
    calling out Apollo's painted lumminous skies,
    I let out a caterwaulling cry,
    fear for what today may become.

    Sprawled out on a molding loveseat,
    with no one to love,
    I lay in utter agony,
    paranoid if it will happen today.

    I cringe at the blinding sunlight,
    cursing it back to Hyperion,
    The night doesn't last forever,
    and I wish the night will swallow the sun/

    Time never changes,
    just into darkness,
    I will grow frail,
    and die in this God foresaken world.

    Im sick of the poisons they feed me,
    Oh please someone cut me from the teather,
    so I can have my one wish- let me die alone.

    Submitted on 2007-04-10 23:16:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      being alone on a loveseat sucks... especially if you know its called a loveseat. i reallly like this piece and i really hope toread more by you soon. keep up the amazingly awesome work. what is the message you are waiting for from appollo??? keep posting so i can keep reading......

    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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