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Of a yearning


Author: cabbalistic
ASL Info:    20/f
Elite Ratio:    8 - 47 /35 /12
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Of a yearning


Parting deep waters
that seep through fingers
less benign.

To eclipse moonshine
with thoughts shimmering,
uncolored.

Bless ragged vision,
a twinkle amidst thorns,
of hating.

Oh, cross-legged soul!
Your gaze pondering
stars afar.

Willing peace,
not pieces of fate,
a world free for all




Submitted on 2007-04-11 01:55:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow i loved this piece from start to finish i love the structure i love the flow and the imagery well delivered

Timmy S. Edgar
| Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
  It starts "deep" and continues that swim. A very thoughtful and ultimately considerate state of mind follows. A nice read for this morning, thanks!
| Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  Its very abstract but sounds great read out loud. Writes like these spawn all kinds of revelations and memories among readers...but those who appreciate that sort of thing are but a few of far between.

Don't lose your taste for creating work like this, but don't ever restrict yourself to it either.


MyX
| Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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