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    dots Submission Name: Forever... Changeddots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 415
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       Another submission for Jacquelyn. You all know her as "Jackz" on Elite Skills. I absolutely adore her! Big news: We are now engaged! So, back off guys, she's mine! :) This now has music as well...


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    dotsForever... Changeddots
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    Everybody searching for something I've already found...
    The one who makes the world complete and keeps you on the ground.
    So much time gets wasted when you spend it all alone.
    We have never wasted time or we never would have known...

    that it was I who makes you laugh,
    and holds you when you cry.
    I want to always make you happy.
    Don't you ever question why.

    We need to always be together.
    I can't stand to be apart.
    It's never been this easy dealing
    with these matters of the heart.

    We waited for our turn.
    Paid our dues and felt the burns.
    And we'll be forever.

    I will dry your eyes
    while you cut things down to size.
    And we'll be forever... changed.

    changed because of this.

    All the things that you were looking for,
    you found them all in me.
    But it's frightening when the future is so difficult to see.
    I have never met another who could measure up to you.
    You're all I could imagine,
    and much more than I ever knew.

    You've been the one thing I was missing.
    I'm the one thing that you need.
    It's like a Cinderella story...
    Don't be too afraid to read.
    I know it has a happy ending,
    but we have to turn the page.
    I will hold you oh so tightly
    when your convictions you engage.

    So the moment came
    and you were screaming out my name,
    and we'll be forever.

    I'll be full of tears
    when you're confronting all your fears,
    and we'll be forever... changed.

    So when you're feeling lonely
    for the one persistent man
    to be your everything and only,
    I'm the only one who can.
    You will always be my baby,
    and I'll never let you go.
    I want to take away the pain
    you felt so very long ago.

    Although it may seem complicated
    and no answers come to mind.
    The solution is to leave those
    faded, tired relationships behind.
    You found your true perfect companion,
    wanting, waiting patiently.
    I want to be the world to you,
    and you mean everything to me.

    You know how I feel.
    There is no doubt that this is real.
    And we'll be forever.

    Everything I'll be...
    the reason you're in love with me is
    we'll be forever... changed.

    Changed because of this.

    I'll be forever...
    You'll be forever...
    We'll be forever...

    changed.




    Submitted on 2007-04-11 06:31:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can only echo what the others have said about this beautiful poem. It practically screams L-O-V-E from the very first line to the very last. I only wish that you had used the "forever changed. changed by this" more often because it is one of those sets of lines that makes you get that giddy feeling in your stumach.

    In some parts the stanzas are not the same as the rest of the poem, are you meaning for it to be like that?

    I like how your rhyming is the same throughout basically and yet you never allowed it to get too sing-song-y and every line fit perfectly but we never saw the rhyme coming. Once again, beautiful.

    Thank you so much for sharing your incredible poem with us and best of luck!~
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by AshNight | [ Reply to This ]
      aww.. this is amazing, although I don't understand whywe are forever changed? It is because what I'm going threw and having you there, the end result making us closer so that then forever changes us and what we have going for one another.. is that.. the change is coming from?

    I enjoyied this to a great extent, you can write dave really you can! this simply proves what I say... keep it up i hope to see more new posts!

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I can only say one thing, wow. This was amazing! I don't normally like to give only praise but I can't find anything I don't like in this. It says what I wish my exboyfriend who I still love would say but I know he never will. I love him dearly. Unrequinted love sucks. Well thank you so much for sharing. Peace.
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by RedneckPrincess | [ Reply to This ]


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