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    dots Submission Name: Today Is A Brand New Daydots
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    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsToday Is A Brand New Daydots
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    What is this wonderful feeling, taking over me,
    Could it be for once, I am actually happy.
    Perhaps today, the clouds have passed, and left a silver lining.
    The rain has stopped pouring, the sun is now shining.

    What is this glorious feeling, warming my insides.
    I can walk with with my head high, taking great strides.
    I'm ignoring all the looks of pity, and the strangers stares.
    Everyone knows I'm not normal, but for once, I say, who cares?

    My cheeks feel like their gonna bust, if my smile grows much more.
    I've beat the blues, I'm feeling fine, today's gonna be great, for sure.
    I'm not lonely, I'm single, young and free.
    No psycho boyfriend on my ass, that's just fine by me.

    My mum can't hurt me, no not today,
    I'll beat her negative remarks away.
    Bullies? fuck em, one and all.
    I'll stand strong, when they each fall.

    Nothing's gonna get me down, cos today's a brand new start.
    This poem might be pretty lame, but the words are from my heart.
    As for anyone who doesn't like the things I say...
    Shove your critique up your ass...and oh, have a nice day. :o)




    Submitted on 2007-04-11 07:08:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. It's so much different from your other stuff, yet it's still just as great. I kept getting a hint of sarcasm in this poem, especially the last line. Even in this poem you couldn't help but throw a little sarcasm in there. Which I would be thrown off balance if you hadn't. Overall my day's been pretty good, and this poem seemed to reach me. Of course I'm only less depressed because I have a girlfriend now. I wonder how long my happiness is gonna last.....
    | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your spunk young lady. The content of this piece is very uplifting for your own spirits and that's a good thing. The flow of the piece is a bit ragged but it is already obvious that you don't give a [censored]. If writing this gave you a release, all the better for it.
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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