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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 924
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Couldn't think of anything to write so this kind of came out just for fun...BLAH


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    Hi there…
    I am looking for something.
    Can you help me look for it?
    I am looking for a really small thing.
    A little like broken glass but it is shining.
    It shines even in the darkest places…
    I lost it just a little while ago, a moment ago.
    Please, please help me?

    It is not new, about as old as I am.
    It has cracked and healed in many places.
    It is really fragile so…
    Can you be really careful with it?
    That is if you see it.
    I will be really grateful.
    It is worth nothing to you, but it means the world to me.
    You see, the thing I want you to help me look for…
    It’s my soul.




    Submitted on 2007-04-11 08:27:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww thats soo sweet. the title caught me tho.
    ohh? wats this shiny broken glass looking thing that have been cracked and healed in many places?
    here ya go.
    okay. that was lame. but wateva.
    loved it.
    very very niceee.

    Fungi
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by deathbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't understand how someone can lose something as beautiful as a soul that shines in the darkest places... even though it happens very often. Hope this isn't true because you ain't gonna find it as it was... it will be chipped.

    The poem is good... the idea is very good. I was expecting prose but I enjoyed reading it.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Sad Lion
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Sad Lion | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool. I was expecting it to be your heart at the end. This almost sounds liek a plea to your soulmate to help enrich your life... If you believe in that stuff. I love those random poems that come out of nowhere. Good write. What more can I say?
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]


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