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    dots Submission Name: Song Of The Winddots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsSong Of The Winddots
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    Iíve sailed the seven sanguine seas of fate,
    Marked wizard winds that hurried us along,
    So eager now my wanderlust to sate,
    Bemused I heard the windís contagious song.

    I listened as a distant bell now tolled,
    And paced the tanned teak deck as one bronze gong
    Was struck with steely hammers worked with gold,
    Bemused I heard the windís contagious song.

    Along the coast were iron idols set,
    I watched their turbaned worshipers now throng
    For villainies unheard, unguessed, and yet,
    Bemused, I heard the windís contagious song.

    Then on a barren shore upon some isle
    One lean limbed Siren in her beige sarong
    She sang her song, the dead to thus beguile,
    Bemused, I heard the windís contagious song.

    For weeks from realm to mythic realm we swung,
    From port to magic port to thus prolong
    My wanderlust and climb strange rung on rung,
    Bemused, I heard the windís contagious song.

    Then, dead astern, I watched him so pursue,
    A masted ship like mine, though twice as long,
    Three banks of oars all worked with ormolu;
    Bemused, I heard the windís contagious song.

    Iíve sailed the seven sanguine seas of fate,
    Marked wizard winds that hurried us along,
    So eager now my wanderlust to sate,
    Bemused I heard the windís contagious song!




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      I love the sea so this one a fav. I love it. the whole thing plays games with you almost and doesn't let up. the imagery is wonderful, you've got a way with words that just seems to be natural. I love it.

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    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by BrokenNexava | [ Reply to This ]
      Song of The Wind! I am automatically attracted to any poem/prose that has the wind as it's theme, and one of my poem's has the title "The Wind's Song"!

    This was excellent! Had me riding high the waves with a view from the Forecastle, idealically beckoned on by your wind's contagious song! This excellent poem took me to another land, another time, another place! Really excellent, Michael!
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      You seem to have a certain motif crush or should I say you like the 'Siren' motif and use it quite often if my mind doesn't play tricks on me. The sea also seems to be close. The thing is that whatever you write it always has a fresh feel to it, always original. The repetition of the last line in every stanza really makes it sound more effective when read aloud. Once again, I must say, your imagery surpasses many poets and it's the way you use imagery that I like the most about your style.
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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