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    dots Submission Name: feathersdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    dotsfeathersdots
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    i dazzled the wind again
    like the drain of alchoholic pavement
    crushed beneath the sunset's earthly vibe
    and twisted trunks can sing for them

    those two contending idols
    filmed inside eachother's mouths
    teeth shown like fearful lioness
    guilty pleasures in the burning of ships

    i oceaned again last night
    waves beneath my shattered paw
    a blanket of smooth skin
    my ever loving hands were yours

    the pearled tips of building frenzy
    nightly hidings in the local shy
    like two caroming blades of light
    avoiding eachother's smiles

    in the thick darkness of the wood
    where my lovers hair resides
    beneath the moon and stars above
    there is a grave where our passion lies

    it is to be exhumed in ritual
    weekly dabblings in the dark art
    in our fineries made of flesh
    let the moisture eat our minds alive




    Submitted on 2007-04-11 16:42:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know about this one. It seems to be just on the edge of being finished. Maybe some revising? But I dont see anything wrong with it, in fact it kinda makes me want you a lot, lol.
    Don't ask..
    That was a little odd and embarrassing...
    excuse me, but I have lust for those who write well.
    You take my mind somewhere else, and thats exactly what I need right about now.

    So what I was meaning to ask you is...
    Is that picture you or something you found on the internet somewhere? Just wondering..

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      wow again i am at a loss for words. i love the way you just roll words out on a page and it works out in a way that tickles the senses and doesnt completely make sense. i love how surreal everything seems. your skill is unmatched these days. keep writing!
    ali
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      now there's the blackbird we all know and love. much more like yourself in this one the last line is so moving. creepy and delightful. in fact that whole last stanza was my favorite. briliant
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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