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2 this Girl ( Untitled )


Author: Sun Spots
ASL Info:    99/ sex yes please/ HeLL
Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 36 /70 /36
Words: 300
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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2 this Girl ( Untitled )



This is for you girl

and this is not a song or poem

to get you back

just listen to my words


Listen I don't plan

To Offend you or critize you

Your in charge of your own life

Your in charge of your body

And nights

I must confess I fell in love with you like a child does

I must admit I don't regret any of it

From that love I gain experience

From that love I satisfied

My anxieties

And my desires

And I must apologize

For my doubtless

Actions

In this writing

I call a poem

But When the soul cries my love

Silence nor time

Is a remedy for the pain

I hear she has another lover

And I congratulate you

I Hope he's everything you

Wanted in a man

But I must tell you

And I don't mean to sound

Conceited nor I mean to put myself

In a Pedestal

But to me he doesn't compare

Nor does he reach my feet

In pain and poverty

I learn to love and care

Through this adversity

Is where my ambition

Humbleness and love

Came

But sometimes a genuine heart

Is not want females always want

And I'am man

I can reason and accept truthfulness

I hope he brings

You to cloud not 9th

But 10th

Within time you will realize

That love that I gave
was one of a kind
and it wasn't a lie




Submitted on 2007-04-11 19:43:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked it.
but i'm a sap and it was sweet :)
still, keep up the good work
Regards, Kalinda
| Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]


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