Self-Absorbed You

Author: Keller ASL Info:    18/F/Canada Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 36 /26 /17 Words: 91

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Self-Absorbed You

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Stay away You brute I cannot stand to look at you With your domineering ways And your evil eye, piercing through Your views are all that matter Where am I In your eyes? You cannot see me For I am merely a ghost In the shadow of your ideals You are so tainted You cannot see the truth behind the muddied waters Made black by the hearts you've broken You don’t care You don’t even know I’m there Nor anyone else for that matter You are the one you love

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I really like this. I've felt this way before... It's really cute... It's a really cute write... Love ya Lizzie

| Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]

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