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Self-Absorbed You

Author: Keller
ASL Info:    18/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 36 /26 /17
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Self-Absorbed You

Stay away
You brute
I cannot stand to look at you
With your domineering ways
And your evil eye, piercing through
Your views are all that matter
Where am I
In your eyes?
You cannot see me
For I am merely a ghost
In the shadow of your ideals
You are so tainted
You cannot see the truth behind the muddied waters
Made black by the hearts you've broken
You don’t care
You don’t even know I’m there
Nor anyone else for that matter
You are the one you love

Submitted on 2007-04-12 09:37:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like this. I've felt this way before... It's really cute... It's a really cute write...
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| Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]

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