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    dots Submission Name: dont...dots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dont look at me
    with those eyes.
    the blinded ones
    that will never see
    how much i love you still

    dont touch me
    with those hands.
    the one i can no longer grasp
    no onger hold so close
    what made me feel good

    dont laugh
    with that melodious voice.
    it brings me torture,
    memories of yesterday
    a sirens song,
    that drives me crazy

    dont talk to me
    you dont care anymore
    your words last only for a moment
    and my response is meaningless

    dont act like you know
    you dont even try to understand
    you are just another one of them.
    i fell in accual love with you
    but i didnt matter to you.

    dont try
    to talk me out of this.
    this final moment
    of my life.
    this....
    suicide.
    dont try.....
    ....not that you would....




    Submitted on 2007-04-12 09:46:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this.
    Ive never been able to write an un-rhyming poem.
    If that's even a word.
    So i really envy those that can write such poems, and still make it work, with the right rhythm and amount of syllables to make it sound good.
    very nice.

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    Sam
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by UnbrokenHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is good. very good. But I hope this is fiction, even the part about suicide. I don't think that I have ever been in love or should I say been in a love that would bring be to that point.
    No one is ever worth killing yourself over.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that.... not that you would... nice





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty f'n good!!!! I can relate completely to this write, except for the suicide, (I don't believe in killing myself) but it does fit perfectly into this piece. I feel the emotion because I have been there and it sucks! I definately dig this and will more than likely fav it 2.
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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