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    dots Submission Name: the deja vu ive fucked up beforedots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsthe deja vu ive fucked up beforedots
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    it is the same scenario all over again
    i can see my life flashing before my eyes
    streaking back to a time when
    i was the one screwing up a happy couple
    and i was the one who didnt think it over
    and i was the one who didnt want the responsibility
    i was the one who couldnt handle being serious
    i was the one who couldnt love enough
    and now i know that i deserve this

    its all coming back
    every word i said and every promise i couldnt keep
    every promise i didnt even know i was making
    its all slipping into my head like a cancer
    blossoming out and settling in til it itches and all i can do is remember
    every lie i told and every tear i cried when it was all said and done

    i bet youre going to be sorry
    because i was
    but at least now i cant hate you because ive been there done that
    and you didnt start it like me
    you didnt want it like me
    you only played it like me
    so im still the bitch here
    the cold glass bitch up high on a ledge surrounded by pushing hands

    its all in my head
    the mean words i said that couldnt be erased no matter how much i wanted to scoop them up and rip them into shreds til noone could see what they meant
    and every time she said i let her down
    youre letting me down now
    slow and easy even though i deserve to be smashed
    but its ok
    ill break anyway




    Submitted on 2007-04-12 16:09:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you for writing the story of my life at the moment.

    beautiful.

    "and every time she said i let her down
    youre letting me down now
    slow and easy even though i deserve to be smashed
    but its ok
    ill break anyway"

    ahhhh.
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah wow. Really, really enjoyed this one. Something about the word choice, it really struck me. So open and plaintive, confessional almost. It's certainly relatable, I think there's a regret in everything. Really great write, though. Definitely a favorites addition.

    -Guernica
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Guernica | [ Reply to This ]


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