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    dots Submission Name: A Stray Childdots
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    Author: FallenAngelJC
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 47/53/41
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Stray Childdots
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    Clinging to your lonesome body admist the winter snow,
    You stare into glasses among the street, what is it you are looking for?
    Are you lost in your way? deep in an ocean's story,
    One child admist a faceless crowd...

    Do not pity me stranger, I am but only alone,
    Isnt it alright to be by myself?
    I only have nowhere to go,
    So I am a child standing admist a moving world...

    Having no smile on your face, lips as red as blood on snow,
    You've been standing from morning light to evening's embrace,
    Do you understand the feelings of a heart? does it not hurt?
    A Child who is no one's heart and soul...

    What is a smile stranger? It doesnt hurt not to smile,
    I've learnt not to cry anymore, as tears only turn to Ice shards on my cheeks,
    Nobody is here stranger, no one at all,
    I have no reason to have a heart and soul...

    Do you not remember? your memories to lead you back...
    You havent said a word to anyone, not even a whisper
    The night is turning harsh to Winter's freezing touch,
    A Stray Child...

    I have a memory stranger, of a warm hand leaving mine
    I need not have a voice, the world around me is drowned in their own sound,
    I do not fear Winter's freezing touch, as my heart is already frozen,
    I am not a stray stranger, I'm just alone...

    Stranger, would you come to me?
    Have you heard my voice?
    Have you seen my tears?
    Have you felt my heart?

    Stranger...save me...




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      ~*~

    I must say that I've drowned in this poem. It utterly reminds me of myself. Often, if not all the time, I feel like a lonesome lost little child with no place to turn to. I suppose it's just a feeling of being misplaced in a very big world with no knowledge of what destiny your stars should be writing for you or what you want to do with it.
    It's a beautiful write and I personally find it captivating.

    ~*~

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    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...
    this is. really good.
    loved it.
    i half agree with RyuloTZR. but i find it very original.
    keep it up jamsie.
    one of ur bests.


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    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by deathbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      A part of me find this contradicting... Since alternative stanzas the stranger and the stray child were like, communicating of sorts, yet in the second from last stanza the stray child was wondering, pleading if he was heard. I was like... 'huh'?

    Upon reading this I've already had a little scene in my mind going on... until said stanza bummed me. That's why I find that people would probably find this hard to comment on.

    Wonderfully, you conveyed the words in such a magical and smooth manner. However, forgive me, I find this unoriginal.
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]



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