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    dots Submission Name: Married to a Dreamdots
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    Author: redeemer
    ASL Info:    19/female/venus
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 85/93/58
    Words: 417
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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    dotsMarried to a Dreamdots
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    Staring at the man, the wondeful person, I will soon marry...I feel an emptiness inside...
    They tell me it's cold feet...they tell me all the lies...they tell me what they think I need to hear...
    I need to hear the truth...and the truth is...he is not what I was hoping for...
    We've been together what feels like forever...yet I often think of another...
    This one time love...that only last weeks...a deep love...that I cannot seem to replace...
    How do I forget him?...how do I move on?...I need this out of my system...get him off my mind...

    The ceremony is beautiful...just like I hoped it would be...it's the wedding of my dreams...
    It's him sitting there...or maybe it's not...maybe I'm halucinating....maybe I'm not...
    I inch closer...my father as my guide...guide me to the man I can't forget...the love I can't leave behind...
    We walk passed him...the man in my dreams...yet the man sitting there is not him...
    I make it to the alter...tears rolling down my cheeks...my husband to be...must think it's because I'm 'so' happy...if he only knew...
    I choke through my vows...I make it through the reception...faking a smile...looking a happy and satisfied wife...

    It's been years since I've felt so completly alone...misunderstood....lost and confused...why didn't he come...maybe he doesn't feel the same way...maybe he doesn't think of me...best forget it...

    I make it my whole life...never feeling completely satisfied with the way my life went...
    I had children and grand-children....and even some great ones...but never fullfilled what I dreamt of most...
    Don't get it twisted the man I married was a great man...but the other....was and is still always on my mind...

    By a life lesson...we learn we all have to die...now it's my turn...my final day has come...
    I lay in a hospital bed...my family surrounds me...tears are running down their faces...
    They all tell me they love me...and the little ones...ask me not to go...
    I get a smile...the pure innocent little minds...just can't grasp that I don't go by choice...
    However, I am tired and wish to leave...this life that I have lived unsatisfied....

    Everything goes blank...and I don't feel like breathing anymore...my body slows down...
    I'm scared and wish someone would hold me...I clasp at the hospital bed sheets...as I slip away...
    He grabs my hand...that man from my dreams...he says he sorry he's late...and I slip away into nothingness...
    I die the same woman I was born...I die having lived a life completly unsatisfied...




    Submitted on 2007-04-13 23:11:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...you writings are just hitting so close to home for me..as they always do. I don't even know what to say...to think that we could live our lives unsatisfied..knowing that we could have been happier with someone else...knowing that we felt deeper for someone else...it's such a horrible thing. None of us want to live unhappy..and then to die not feeling like we got the most out of life...is REALLY depressing. To think we could marry a great man...but to know we could have married a BETTER man...is something I don't even know how to deal with. It doesn't really seem fair to anyone involved. This was an amazing write. Definitely a favorite. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2007-05-03 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my gosh . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . this was a great piece. Once I started to read it I just had to find out how it ended. The . . . . . . . . . . .when I did read th ending I was blown away. The last line was truly my favorite :

    I die the same woman I was born...I die having lived a life completely unsatisfied...


    It left me with a feeling of emptiness, but I was content at the same time. I love the whole story line. . . . . . . . . . . . . . like the course of one's life and the whole woulda coulda shoulda deal. This was one of the best pieces I have read in a while. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . It definitely goes in my faves.

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    SD
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]


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