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Automatic Evolution

Author: Mr. Creep
ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This is a repost I know.
I forgot to title it before.

Automatic Evolution

A thread of vulger lines,
A simple spread of un-treatable disease.
A lonley old widow waiting patiently for death,
but death is busy working with a man fresh into meth.

The coffee drips evermore,
And the sore rubbing of the slow ticks of time.
The crow sits on the tomb,
as the fetus dies slowly within the womb.

Teachings of the old testiment wither away,
as the grey sky turns a bright orange.
The pianist plays a minuet for death,
but death is busy giving cancer to young
dreamer, beth.

And the world just moves on its own.
Without greif or care for the sorrowful beings.
And the wolf catches the pungent scent of suicide in the wind.

Submitted on 2007-04-14 03:45:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  omg amazing. great qwork of forseeing. it makes you wonder if the world could really become this. wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Write on,
| Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting, but i liked it. GREAT WORK
| Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]

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