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    dots Submission Name: Monsterdots
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    Author: Wolfie
    ASL Info:    18/Male/sweden
    Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 66/61/37
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMonsterdots
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    There is a monster inside me
    A maggot of evil, creeping through my veins
    Filling my mind with images of despair
    I can feel it, always haunting my thoughts
    Always waiting to break free, to control me
    The taint on my soul, a mark of horror
    To be rid of it I must obliterate myself

    I am afraid to feel
    It feeds on sadness, anger, pain and distress
    All born from love, happiness, joy and laughter
    Any of which allows it to consume my mind
    To seal it away I must shut down all emotion
    Closing all the gates to my heart, my mind
    Yet it waits, always waiting for an opening
    A crack, and it slips through to take me

    Get it out of my head
    It is my curse, and I am its vessel
    It is the rapist in the dark
    The father molesting his daughter
    The tyrant killing his people
    It is death and destruction
    Pain’s older brother agony
    And it is controlling me

    I am inside a monster
    With no control I can only watch
    As it unleashes its rage, lashing at the world
    Killing, hurting, torturing, massacring
    I can feel it shivering from pleasure
    As the dagger sinks through flesh and scrapes bone
    It orgasms to death, leaving me behind
    Drowning in the blood that should’ve been my own




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      it paints a horrifying yet interesting masterpiece in imy head. your pain and agony radiates for miles here. i love it. it's a little lenghthy on the verses for my personal taste, but it works for you. again it is luminates the gremlins and stands them in the limelight for all to awe at.
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope you feel better after having written this. its really intense and does very little for me though im not sure it is sposed to in some ways.
    i say it does nothing for me because this is a very personal battle.
    im sure we all have our monsters we have to face and its quite possible that no one else will ever totally understand the monsters or our ways of dealing with them.

    i read this piece and i think a few things.
    i think "surely it cant be as bleak as its being painted to be" but then i think back to when i was suicidally depressed and i know all to well that it could be bleaker if allowed.

    it reminds me of the few pieces i have on my computer that were written by my boyfriend who ended his life nearly 3 years ago... his writings were all about confronting monsters and such and while i took them seriuosly and tried to help there was very little i could do because a) they werent my monsters and i didnt understand them and b) he never was able to articulate his monsters the way he wanted to.

    i dont know.
    i guess i dont get this piece because while you refer to a whole lotta different things you dont actually seem to tell the reader what the monster is...
    i dont know... i guess this piece with all its darkness just... isnt something i understand at all anymore.

    maybe try taking your monster and writing about it in a less "blood dripping off a scalpel" kinda way...?
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      My goodness, so much hate and agression in a person who seems so mellow. Not meaning to pry, but what's the story behind this masterpiece? It's a wonderful read, but as the reader I like to know the inspiration to the work. Again great job on this piece!
    Beautiful yet, Corrupted
    Dominique
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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