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    dots Submission Name: Broken Path Of Insanitydots
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    Author: blood red angel
    ASL Info:    16/m/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 18/18/23
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 79
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    Bytes: 1144



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    dotsBroken Path Of Insanitydots
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    Sifting through these thoughts of mine
    I begin to wonder what I will find
    Maybe something that was lost
    But I wonder what that will cost

    I’ve been walking a long and broken path
    And it appears that it hath
    Not an end and is only growing darker
    I’ve passed the insanity marker

    Blood flows from every direction
    It flows across the path like a hungry infection
    The horror of my mistakes hit me head on
    I feel like Satan’s spawn

    Never again will I see the light
    Never again will I pick a fight
    I was wrong
    Now I don’t belong

    I am dead to this world
    The people here ignore me
    I feel like im being swirled
    Around in a black sea

    All I know is torment
    And the never ending pain
    But not to the greatest extent
    I wish I could feel the rain

    Upon my face
    I wish I could run
    From this desolate place
    Back to where everything begun

    So that I might change it all
    And stop my continuing fall




    Submitted on 2007-04-14 16:20:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i like your poem, but the search for rhyming words kinda made the flow short in a few places. read it outloud and you can see for yourself. but i still like the idea and the way you creatively expressed yourself.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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