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    dots Submission Name: as love turns to hatedots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsas love turns to hatedots
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    i hate you
    but still love you
    why do i hate you?
    maybe you wanted more than you could handle
    was it that?
    what did i do wrong?
    did i hurt you somehow?
    with you everything was perfect
    my love was purely true
    i would give everything, ANYTHING you wanted
    ...and more
    was it not good enough?
    you made me not care about anything
    only you were important to me
    i would never think about cheating
    but...you did it to me
    why?
    at least one small pitiless reason!!
    but you gave me none
    in the end, i still love you
    but this past turned love into hate




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      what a painful emotional poem...
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. the idea behind this is very universal, and you are very frank about how you say it. I do suggest though that you go through and revise some of your lines. A few of them are awkward. Kudos on using punctuation, not many people do that on here. Live, Love, Write.
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess this piece shows how you learned one of life's toughest lessons when it comes to love and relationships. Unfortunately there are many hurdles one must leep in the pursuit of the lasting relationship that we all so desperately seek. Your points were strong and the reader could feel your pain and disappointment.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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