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    dots Submission Name: imperfectious blissdots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 113/123/142
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsimperfectious blissdots
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    behind your smile
    are tears I see
    I'll be the one that only stays
    because I'm traped by your sway
    And all I see are your imperfections

    Can't you see your dying
    Because you're hopelessness is
    is to big to move

    powerless denial
    there's nothing here you see
    why don't you look around you
    and try to see what I see

    Can't you see your dying
    Because you're hopelessness is
    is to big to move

    Can't you see your dying
    Because you're hopelessness is
    is to big to move







    Submitted on 2007-04-14 19:12:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i much like, the repetitiveness at the end is like wow, it worked out well, and this is from someone who hate repetitiveness. so good job peace out this is my last critique for a long time so i hope you feel specail. im done with people!
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]



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