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    dots Submission Name: Watch Your Mouthdots

    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 1003
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    dotsWatch Your Mouthdots

    What the fuck is up with all the negative reviews?
    Don't you fucks realise, your hurtful comments give me the blues?
    I don't know about you other peeps, but poems are my souls express.
    When people spit the nasty shit, it leaves my head in a fucking mess.

    Words have power, so watch your mouth, your view might bite you on the ass.
    You shouldn't say derogatory things, even if our poems are crass.
    Seriously though, poetry is my only form of expression.
    For me at least, I know for sure, it's one way of beating depression.

    I don't give a fuck if I spell things wrong, I know what I meant.
    Next time you write a review, check it over before you send.
    For if one day, you write a poem, that nobody else likes much.
    You might just find your heart is broke, because your poem fucking SUCKS!!!

    Submitted on 2007-04-15 08:22:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I disagree - there is a difference between poetry I post for criticism and poems I don't. I think that if people put work on here it should be because they want to know how they could improve it - workshopping is part of a drafting process...

    However, in particular relation to this poem its humour and its passion have created a poem which is fun to read. Its singsong rhyme scheme undercuts the fact that the speaker seems to be genuinely hurt by negative comments. I am particularly intrigued by the fact that it makes the reader feel so damn uncomfortable.

    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by teacake | [ Reply to This ]
      Well by God, you certainly manged to get your ya ya's out in this scathing piece. I can't sit here and honestly say that I don't agree with most of what you said. Well all feel personally invested in the pieces that we choose to post on this site and rampant negativity can have a genuine bite. What kills me is when i see so many views on my works and so few corresponding comments. It makes you wonder whether to chalk that up to the fact that the piece sucked or the reader was just a lazy SOB. Keep writing and posting and let the chips fall where they may.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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