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    dots Submission Name: last things lastdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 839
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    Description:
       this is my last posst for a while like i said, i need to just chill. (this is one of my five minute writing also, part 3 i beleive)


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    dotslast things lastdots
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    last things last
    forget the past
    no need to cry
    over time long gone by

    i hate the wind
    that brougt the change
    the change that
    allways comes





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      this is the title of the Rachels song that makes me cry everytime i hear it. i hope the wind doesnt get too bad anytime soon. its a nice poem that i still cant help associating with the Brick and the Rose, and it also reminds me of the movie Chocolate.... I really like how the first stanza ryhmes and the second doesnt. The second flows so well that it doesnt matter. Also, just note that you spelled: Brought, and always, wrong.
    Ive read this before, but i was too sad to comment :P

    :) tennisfuzz
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by tennisfuzz | [ Reply to This ]
      Life is about change. The wind, the rain, the pain.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      rhyming in the beginning is too obvious, but I like that last stanza
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]


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