Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Give and take of love and breakdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/91
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1544
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 573



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsGive and take of love and breakdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I want you to think
    of me as heartless.
    The more you say
    The less i feel.

    I want to watch
    as you break.
    Into a million pieces
    of lies and diseption.

    I want to know
    that you hurt
    That you fall
    when you trip up.

    I want to see
    your misery unfold.
    onto you
    till it crushes you.

    I want you to
    never see me hurt.
    never see me miserable.
    Never see me break.

    That's not even for me
    to see.




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 13:18:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      babe.....i liked this from an objective view but knowing that it came from you really just made me sad.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    140541

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry