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    dots Submission Name: Sticky Candy Handsdots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSticky Candy Handsdots
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    Holding Hearts.
    Walking along the playground.
    Swinging
    Swinging
    Back and Forth.

    Rolling down hills
    Ollie Ollie oxenfree and Jack in a box.
    Holding hands and twirling
    Spinning
    Spinning
    The world was a blur of shapes
    But you were always clear.
    Spinning
    Rolling
    Swinging
    Always on the go.
    Candy through our Lite-Brite viens.

    Laying on the grass lush
    with imagination staring at
    skies so wide and high
    But we made it fun with
    pictures of clowns and alligators
    opeque with laughter.

    The sky was wide and out of reach.
    But you'll always be there for me
    Clearer than the sky.




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 13:23:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Candy through our Lite-Brite viens.

    I love that line.


    I think if you make it sound a little more mature it would make a nice juxtoposition with the idea of childhood and innocence.

    I like it a lot.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]
      :) you already read this to me but i still say it makes me sad.. but its good too. its happy sad.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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