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    dots Submission Name: Unknown and Untraveled still to remaindots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsUnknown and Untraveled still to remaindots
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    I'm afraid of roads untraveled.
    I'm afraid to ride the waves of untold rivers.
    I don't wanna go unless i know
    where all the bumps are.
    I want to know all the auto cars
    to be weary of.
    I want to see the dead end
    before the signs slap my cheeks first.

    So i've driven into the sun
    in a trailblazer taking me
    as far as his love could go.

    So now i'm walking for the gas station.
    Hoping some one i can love
    will save me from the heat.
    but the cars pass with nothing
    But a breeze.




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 13:27:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a really good start, but could be fleshed out a little bit.

    you have the talent to do it and retain the same kind of feeling.

    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]


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