Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Unknown and Untraveled still to remaindots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1017
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 619



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsUnknown and Untraveled still to remaindots
    -------------------------------------------


    I'm afraid of roads untraveled.
    I'm afraid to ride the waves of untold rivers.
    I don't wanna go unless i know
    where all the bumps are.
    I want to know all the auto cars
    to be weary of.
    I want to see the dead end
    before the signs slap my cheeks first.

    So i've driven into the sun
    in a trailblazer taking me
    as far as his love could go.

    So now i'm walking for the gas station.
    Hoping some one i can love
    will save me from the heat.
    but the cars pass with nothing
    But a breeze.




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 13:27:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I think this is a really good start, but could be fleshed out a little bit.

    you have the talent to do it and retain the same kind of feeling.

    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    140543

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Bond written by saartha
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Giving written by jjd
    Push written by JanePlane
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    To written by SavedDragon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Incubus written by monad
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry