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    dots Submission Name: Times Theatredots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsTimes Theatredots
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    Walking on stairs so black and cold,
    In nightshade of a moon so bitter,
    In arms of marble, you I'd hold
    I'd read the thought
    Your mind would not
    And dream of dark, a critter...


    That seeks the pain, for me to read
    With eyes of silver through the light
    And on the path you want to lead
    Me, beyond time
    Beyond the line
    That parts the day from this dim night...

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    Whispering a song enchanting
    Telling dimensions to split
    In her mind, cognitions starting
    To implode
    Then to explode
    In multiverses' perfect fit.


    A birth of time, a clock in space
    A diamond of ideas
    A figurant in speeding race
    Reflecting
    And reacting...
    Upon a cloud to see 'us'.




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 16:13:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you're trying too hard

    just be honest, don't try to sound like something else, it makes you seem insincere

    good start, though
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by andthebandgoes | [ Reply to This ]


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