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    Author: andthebandgoes
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 12/16/11
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    it's a crazy kind of thirst

    it's a crazy kind of insatiable thirst

    it's a crazy kind of insatiable collective thirst

    an unquenchable bone dry exigent yearning

    it's a crazy kind of thirst

    a yearning for an absolute

    a no questions asked no strings attached cure-all

    chasing reason til your souls bleed

    reason that can only be explained by physics

    it's a crazy kind of thirst

    if only there was someone else

    somene else with the same hankering

    no blue in our orange world

    the orange world that exists only in your mind

    because we are alone

    collectively seperate from the collective

    constantly fighting for our fix

    the fix that assauges the collective loneliness

    but what's the fun in accomplishment

    it's the search that counts

    it consumes you

    it's that crazy kind of thirst




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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm not sure what this is. Interesting, nice word choice and all, but there are times when what you're saying seems unclear--like you're talking just to talk. I'm pretty sure there's a statement in there, though--maybe a little more clarity? I don't know, that's just my opinion.

    Later!

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]


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