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    dots Submission Name: What Have You Done To Me?dots
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    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 354
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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       Finally - I wrote this and didn't spontaneously combust!


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    dotsWhat Have You Done To Me?dots
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    This is the last time I shall let my past get me down,
    No more Missus Nice Girl - I'm sick of this permanent frown -
    Every time I think about you - my soul withers and dies.
    The past eats away at me - I can't forget, despite my tries.

    The manic phone calls, the tyrant-like texts.
    I ignored all - who KNEW you were a pest.
    I was young and stupid - thought I knew no wrong.
    Your 'emotions' and BLACKMAIL - made me weak not strong.

    You weren't a beast - clearly mentally unstable.
    It's about time I got this off my chest, all cards on the table.
    I dumped everyone for you - the good AND the bad.
    You shouted and screamed, because losing Him made me sad.

    You put me through hell; I die inside when I remember the past.
    That is why yesterday, I blocked you out of my life at last.
    I might speak to you again when your memory doesn't make me sick.
    My flesh feels contaminated - at my own skin I pick.

    There's so much to be told about the harm you have done.
    It has taken five stanzas, to write about just ONE.
    I cannot face you right now - not whilst my head feels like this.
    You wanted my attention ONLY on you - you've got your wish.

    Good luck in your future - I wish you no ill.
    You've broken me down - my heart feels like road kill.
    Thank fuck I broke up with you - not the other way round.
    For if you had dumped me - I'd have never lived it down.

    I'll finish here, for If I write more you'll get hurt.
    You deserve to suffer, for grounding my soul into the dirt.
    See what I mean? my anger over you is expanding.
    Fuck it all Sweety - cos I'm still standing.




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      Reminded me a lot of one of my relationship. Took me ages to get to the point were I can look back at it and not feel fear or hurt or anger, to really let go of it. Took me years in fact not to feel anything every time I hear that common name. Not to flinch. Love your last sentence.

    "Fuck it all Sweety - cos I'm still standing"
    | Posted on 2015-01-21 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I like it. Believe me, I can relate as well. I mean you like them, but your friends dont, but you think you can get past that. You think there is something more. But then you find out you are just wrong, wrong about everything. And in the end everything was just a waste of time.

    Its a great write. Just a couple things:
    last line of third stanza..."Him" are you talking about god? Because if so, then it is kinda random. And if not, well then the line doesnt make much sense. Maybe you should tweak that a bit.

    First line of last stanza "If" I am asuming isnt meant to be capitalized. haha.

    But yeah really great write, I enjoyed it. Good work.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]


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