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    dots Submission Name: heartless tonguesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsheartless tonguesdots
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    i have been seen with such strange eyes
    untouched by phantom hands
    reeling in the hours of island shapes
    i've found peace in the sun and trees

    yet still i'm amongst the melting birds
    crushed beneath tires and heartless tongues
    i've been shown that the easy way is not existing
    for in the flowers of our thoughts we seek to escape

    i have felt such breaths and fingers pulsing
    exhalations of deep tender hushings
    writhing necks collecting liquid
    and arms folding inside the heartbeats

    tight lips raise ships from ghostly depths
    my green woman is a miracle
    in the warm times when we are pressed
    we are most eloquent in our heat




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 20:35:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      exhalting in the jaded brilliance of the melting birds you make my heart scream for resoulution and in these darken'd hour your words create world of understanding light

    my applause
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellence!
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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