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    dots Submission Name: and i am livingdots
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    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsand i am livingdots
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    sometimes i try so hard
    just to make you think of me
    and i know this
    that you never will
    and that just breaks my little heart

    because you can can can
    you most definitely will

    when i cry
    my guts turn black
    and then i vomit like no other
    that you'll ever see
    you make me sick inside
    cause you won't love me

    you're doing this hurt me
    and i know this now
    that you'll never want me again
    you said that you hate me
    but how can that be true
    when i won't let it
    be true

    look, the sky turns gray
    and the clouds are forming
    above me
    yet i linger
    because i think of you
    and how we used to be

    maybe someday
    you will realize
    that i'm still waiting
    out in the rain

    but because you can can can
    you most definitely will

    stomp my little body down
    you will break me
    and you'll destroy me
    but i'll keep coming back for more






    because i can can can.







    Submitted on 2007-04-15 21:45:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow. Well. gramatically first. Some parts seemed a bit choppy, disrupting the flow if only for a little while...

    As for the meaning and over all write. Great. Stupendous. Though you should not have to feel like that. You of all ppl should know what I have been through. There is always light at the end of the tunnel but i think you have caught the train wreck lol. You can do SOOO much better. You are beautiful, inside and out. You deserve someone who will treat you with the love and respect you deserve. Dont tell me such a person does not exist...I found mine, its your turn:)

    ->Your Darkest Angel
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Rhaine

    You can only take the down pour of the rain for so long, till you get soo drenched by it, it holds you down.

    Love is not hurt Love is feeling good withsomeone that wont on purposely hurt you.
    Like a Train that said" I know I can, I know I can" Can only pull up that hill and carry that load for soo long, before it notice, it needs to relax it's wheels and don't overburn.

    i am not suggestion to give up love, i am just suggestion, to not get hurt agin.

    Your friend
    If you need a friend PM me

    peace
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by thelastone | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the persistance that you give off in this.
    i could somehow relate. the only part i didnt like is the can can can. one can wouldve worked fine really.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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