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    dots Submission Name: I don't caredots
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    Author: just an angel
    ASL Info:    17/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 95/109/59
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    dotsI don't caredots
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    I made a mistake
    Forever to regret
    My heart still breaks
    I'll never forget

    I hated it then
    I hate it now
    Never again
    No way, no how

    It hurts me today
    Even more than before
    I thought we were ok
    Turns out I'm still a whore

    You never forgave
    My deadly sin
    Yet I gave and gave
    Showing how sorry I've been

    You don't trust me!
    But I trust you?'
    It wasn't meant to be
    But that's something I knew

    I don't care anymore
    I just don't care
    Pin me to the floor
    My feelings won't be there

    So now I won't love
    We'll just screw
    Something I'm now proud of:
    I'm just like you




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 23:18:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Preety cool,

    But some lines dosent really goes with the whole sequence, but i get how u feel, mistakes are inevitable, we all did something we dont want to, and regret later.. life i guess..

    Overall, its a good poem,

    God Bless
    Dennis
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]


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