Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: On A Roofdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: xingu32
    ASL Info:    18, Male, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.04 - 9/18/36
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 520
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 888



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsOn A Roofdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Have you ever looked at the stars?
    Looked into the midnight sky?
    I have
    With a Pacifico between my legs and a camel hanging out my mouth
    On a tar paper roof, still warm from the days sun
    Just sitting, listing
    Listing to the quietness that says night
    No song bird’s, just bugs and crickets, and bull frogs
    Slowly loosing the everyday battle for warmth to the night’s air.
    I don’t light my camel just let it sit there
    Rolling it between my lips, back and forth
    Looking at the twinkling stars, the orb that is the silver moon
    Leaning back and laying flat on the slanted roof I look up
    The stars wink back at me, but they look cold and far away
    Taking a swig from the beer every now and then in the dark night
    I begin traveling to a far off place, a little closer to the stars




    Submitted on 2007-04-15 23:37:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This has a wonderful dreamlike quality that I just love. In some places the rammer could use some tweaking, but over all I like this peace. It's very visual and easy to imagine.
    Byeyahs
    Lizzy
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.