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    dots Submission Name: nihongo haikudots
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    Author: Kristen Gudsnuk
    ASL Info:    21/f/CT
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 182/229/86
    Words: 9
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       this poem means:
    there is a cold wind
    the wind kills me.

    heheheheeeeeeee
    I wrote a haiku in japanese!!!
    (as far as I know it's grammatically correct, although I used boku, which is kind of masculine, although sometimes boyish girls use it. Atashi (which is more feminine) was too many syllables though!!


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    dotsnihongo haikudots
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    samui kaze ga aru
    kaze wa boku o
    korosu.




    Submitted on 2007-04-16 03:08:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. It's so...authentic. I mean, it's a haiku

    in Japanese.

    If I could read, write, and understand Japanese, I would write all my haiku in it. Unforunately I cannot, so, oh well.

    Well, since it is very traditional (it's in Japanese... it can't get anymore traditional), it needs a kigo, which is a seasonal word of phrase. I'm sure "cold wind" is one. And don't Japanese syllables function differently than english syllables, their kana? I'm not exactly sure how that works, I'm just trying to fluent my knowledge (forgive me, haiku and senryu are just the only fixed-forms I've done tons of research on and pretend to know something about hehe).

    I like this, it's fun to read. The wind is such a knife, yes, yes. What does the title mean though? Nihongo? Enlighten me!

    Like the Buddha!

    Mmm, Buddha belly~

    Okay yeah...it's cool. I wish I knew how to write in other languages, despite not being fluent.

    My two years of Spanish have evaporated to a simple

    ciao.
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by wool raincoat | [ Reply to This ]
      Description:


    this poem means:
    there is a cold wind
    the wind kills me.



    The wind of politics? Bad poetry? Poorly written and drawn Manga? I see you are definitely a Japanophile and willing to fearlessly experiment with fixed forms (in foreign languages, no less). Have you considered writing a series of poems on this subject from the Asian perspective? Just a thought. BTW, nice and stark imagery.

    Take care
    Bill
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, obviously I can't understand what it says, but I think it's awesome that you know japanese.

    I also think haikus are very romantic in a way, so I love that you wrote a haiku in japanese. That impresses me.

    You said the poem means
    "there is a cold wind
    the wind kills me"

    Isn't that the truth? In a physical sense, it was really cold and windy today and it was a real struggle when I walked outside the many times that I did today. In comparision, there are so many times I feel just like I did today, except on the inside. Situations happen, whether they are self-induced or not, they still happen. And sometimes they feel just like the cold, sharp wind.

    Anyways, I'm impressed with the japenese. :) And good haiku too.
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]


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