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    dots Submission Name: I am the Butterflydots

    Author: T. Garrett
    ASL Info:    17, Female(I think;)), Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 25/21/19
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsI am the Butterflydots

    I am the butterfly,
    crushed by your words.
    You ripped of my wings
    with your cruel fingers.
    You ripped out my heart
    with your good-bye.

    I am the butterfly,
    hurting inside.
    I can't fly,
    so I cry.
    You ripped out my heart
    with your good-bye.

    I am the butterfly
    broken all over.
    My wings no longer flutter,
    I'm not who I used to be.
    You ripped out my heart
    with your good-bye.

    I am the butterfly,
    why cause me such pain?
    Knowing I'll never fly again.
    Why don't you just
    crush me all the way?
    You ripped out my heart
    with your good-bye.

    I am the Butterfly....

    Submitted on 2007-04-16 09:06:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well it flowed nicely, was worded greatly, and the emotion was portrayed fantastically. It made me think of times when I was sad over love. I really liked your repetative line, it really gives the poem some kick. This was magnificent. Keep up the awesome wor, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      Ouch! Ouch! An old lover's lament as old as Time itself ... starkly done here .... pain? indeed! nicely done all around ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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