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    dots Submission Name: damn pricksdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 682
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       couple of annoying bastards inspired this one.


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    dotsdamn pricksdots
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    look at them
    they all act like
    theyre better than us

    have they no shame?
    no pride?

    they speak so loud
    even if they are
    the only ones talking!!

    still....
    too loud!!

    they say
    the stupidest things!!
    and theyre starting
    to annoy the hell out of me!!!

    maybe i should talk now...

    tell them the truth of this world
    that will terrify them forever
    show them the anger
    that lies within me

    no...

    why ruin their happiness
    with words?

    then again...

    they need to learn
    that everybodys life
    isnt like theirs!!

    all full of life
    believeing in a "GOD"
    that they say makes their life
    sooo fuckin good

    as if i could give a shit!

    yeah, maybe i should talk....
    throw some fucking common sense into them!




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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, this was quite the rant now wasn't it. Techinically it was not a shining piece of literature but I would assume that you felt much better after getting it out of your system. I would really like to see you use some proper punctuation in your spelling and in your sentence structure, it would go a long way towards making your work more grammatically correct.
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      i lovelovelovelovelovelove this poem!!!! i'm going through the same stuff at the moment and it shows exactly how i feel. F UCKING PRICKS. as my friend lauren would say. i'm favoriting this one!

    sam.fidelity
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by xcut_up_angelx | [ Reply to This ]


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