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    dots Submission Name: Thank You, Now Goodbye.dots

    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 179/157/47
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThank You, Now Goodbye.dots

    Do you remember that out of everything you said,
    You told me to remind you to never leave.
    But then there were all of the other things
    That made me wonder why.
    Your look still sends shockwaves down my spineó
    I hate myself for that.
    I donít know why youíre no longer mine
    And for that Iím thankful.
    Someday Iíll come home again
    And youíll probably be so far away
    Iíll be able to see what could have been
    And laugh quietly to myself.
    Of all the things that could have happened to you and me
    This is the one thing that was a surprise.
    There are times where I wish I could see
    What I really had meant to you.
    A glance from you sends a shock down my spine
    And I hate myself for that.
    I donít know why youíre no longer mine
    And for that Iím thankful.
    The silly things that we used to say,
    The dreams that we made up,
    All the plans for when we went away.
    You stole a part of me
    Thatís fighting to be freeó
    I donít care how long it takes.
    How can I still believe
    In a broken memory?
    Your glances still send a shock down my spine
    I still hate myself for that.
    I donít care why youíre no longer mine
    And for that Iím thankful.

    Submitted on 2007-04-16 09:30:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is very different. I like how you can really feel the angst and the relief after she left him. It's really cool.
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]

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