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    dots Submission Name: today at breakfastdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i saw her today at breakfast
    shes always had a way to afect me somehow.
    now shes ruined my breakfast for me.
    shes made these voices in my head go worst.
    how else will she ruin my life?
    sigh



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    dotstoday at breakfastdots
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    theres too much....

    too much pain
    that will always come
    this one is random.

    too many voices
    all at once
    i cant understand them

    her laugh
    that i fought for
    but lost in the fight

    her voice
    so innocent
    it brought me light

    ugh...
    it was all for nothing
    because now she's gone

    its disgusting
    how i showed my love
    at the break of dawn

    theres too much of her
    within my mind
    within my heart

    it was her
    that made me throw my heart
    back into the dark

    4 16 07
    i will come to pass this day
    but breakfast is now disturbing

    shes back
    and i will now always remmember
    of how my heart was always burning




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