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    dots Submission Name: Why me?!dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
    Total Views: 1035
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 559



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       Man people annoy me.


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    dotsWhy me?!dots
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    I know that life could be worse.
    I could still be living on the streets.
    But Gawd almighty give me a break.
    I go to church when I can.
    I don't do things that I believe are bad.
    This stupid cars in shambles.
    It has litterally been toren to pieces.
    My house I once lived in was taken from me.
    All my friends live far away.
    Why does this keep happening to me?!
    Stupid kids and there rumors.
    I wish I could make them go away.
    Oh well....
    Life sucks and then you die.




    Submitted on 2007-04-16 09:56:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It has a very abrupt ending. I think you could add a but more to this. Put some more explanation in it. What things happened that caused you to get into this situation? Those kind of things.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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